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talse 08-02-2005 09:09 PM

the place to post a comic?
 
i wanted to post a comic i'm making to test it out and see how it's received, and i was wondering if this were the right place.

mammothtank 08-02-2005 09:13 PM

I would put it in Books and Comics, but here might be fine as well.

talse 08-02-2005 09:44 PM

here it is, i call it moonshine.
http://myaka.freeyellow.com/moonshine/001.jpg
i do the scripts and my friend sentia does the art.

we've got 3 in total finished and scanned, the other two are here.
002
003

Skyshot 08-02-2005 10:36 PM

It seems a bit rushed to me. I'd recommend setting things up over a few more comics -- like the guy's name, background, stuff like that. Y'know, exposition.

Looks like it can go somewhere, though. That's good.

talse 08-02-2005 10:40 PM

well, if you think about it, how much exposition was there before black mage blew up the giant? not much, or how much exposition before piro and largo hopped on a plane and flew to tokyo, still a lot of holes in that one. i figure there's plenty of time for exposition and exposition related jokes down the line. possibly involving emu's. or potatoes.

Skyshot 08-02-2005 10:43 PM

Blowing up the giant wasn't central to the plot. If the whole guardian thing is just a quick gag and not the whole point of the series, you're fine; otherwise, you need exposition. Remember how much Brian had before the 8-Bit Survivor episodes, which were central to the plot?

talse 08-02-2005 10:48 PM

well, i've got stuff planned out, almost the first 30 written, and it's quickly followed by why guardianship is important.

Mozan 08-03-2005 04:18 AM

I think it's pretty good. I've seen comics start out with less and still make it big. Good name, good art, good scriptwork, yeah, it seems good.

Smachi Mo 08-03-2005 09:24 PM

loooooooooooooooks gooooooooooooooood, you should check out [static]. I'm trying to get the word out on this comic, no one really knows about it.

Loyal 08-03-2005 10:04 PM

One thing that might help is if you didn't hijack other folks threads to spam a link, don't you agree?

Back on Topic: The comics are funny and well drawn. It made me think of Harvest Moon for a bit... Even though I've never played it. <_<

8/10 (Would probably be higher if there were more comics to read about it).


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