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Hello everyone.

My name is Sean Conchieri, and I am the artist for the new webcomic Cute Ninja Girls. So far there are only three comics up, but it contains the entire first "arc" that I suppose could be considered the origin story. My co-conspirator, Dan Vincent, writes the strip and developed the original idea. (2 ninja sisters living in Boston) So check us out, enjoy the comic, and join the forums, too. We want to hear from you.
Here's our site:

http://www.cuteninjagirls.com

I better see you posting again here. Link & Run's are not OK.

You'll get comments when I see your post count go up.

To clarify, we usually don't like users who sign up just to plug their site (or any other for that matter). Rather we'd like everyone to become a member of our community. Plugging your comic has tradition though, so we allow that - it's still nice if people come back and read the feedback they get.

As for that, it's hard to say something when a comic is still in its early stages, but I do like what I see. Personally I'd prefer if you made use of a little more exposition though - those three comics seemed very rushed, as did the jokes contained (although they were not bad by any means). Tell your readers a bit about who those girls are before you launch straight into the first storyline.

Overall, work on the writing issues a little and something very good could come of this.

Sorry to just jump in like that, guys. I guess I'm just a little too enthusiatic about promoting my comic. I do plan on posting more, though, so my thread won't be just a one time thing. Promise. As for the comic itself, I'll admit, as a beginner to the whole weekly deadline thing, I just may have moved along a little too quickly. I just need to get Dan to start using brighter colors. As for the jokes, they will get a lot better now that the obligatory start-up story is out of the way. Give us another look next Monday. I think you'll like what you see.

well has promise but your pacing seems off. The jokes are abit rushed, the punchline comes a few panels before the strip even ends. If you intend to do multiple strips in a week then don't be afraid that make a few that simply set things up for the next one. Also I would suggest a simple bio comic for the main characters

Cool, Sean isn't going to link&run. My apologies for coming acorss so harsh.

Ok, review-type thing now;

The story DOES kind of just jump into whatevertheheckisgoingon, but I can see it developing into something good later on.

The writing is moderate. It isn't terrible, so it doesn't make me think 'oh great, 12 year old fanfiction caliber, yay.' but it does need work. For instance, the 'Ninja-stealth' joke was really good, but the follow up joke seemed like too much explaining. Naturalness is the key, I think. The audience can infer a lot, and it helps us be interested when you allow for that, instead of very cut-&-dry conversations.

The art? I've seen a lot worse. As it is, if the comic continues, the art will improve greatly. And its well above 'bareable' now, so good job on that.

I suggest rethinking the website layout also, but thats just me. Everything seems a little too big, and the green color scheme isn't very attractive. I know web design is a pain in the butt, however, a good webpage helps to draw readers IMO. Again, this aspect could be a lot worse, so just think about improving it as you continue to work on the comic.

Hi, I'm Dan, Sean's friend and "envisioner" and writer of the strip. I've lurked here at Nuklearpower for years, but never felt compelled to sign up for an account until I saw this.

The "intro story" is Sean's script idea in its entirety, so giving him feedback is a good idea (lord knows I've given enough ;p). As a partnership, I felt it was necessary to let him have his story ideas too, and I didn't really want to do an "intro" story, and just jump right into the intro gag strips I had written.

No comic starts off perfectly, obviously, and I'm not here to defend myself or anything. It's just something I've been trying to get going for the past... year (I'm not the best drawer in the world, although I am a graphic designer by profession, and I would like to think I am a fairly decent author). Every comic takes time to find its groove and I'm glad that people are willing to be patient. A "Mixed reaction" is what I've been seeing so far, but that's because we haven't gotten in our groove yet. The starters to one of my favorite strips, Calvin and Hobbes, was pretty blah compared to the rest of the series, so you just never know.

As far as the website goes, my close friend designed and maintains the website. I'll forward your comments to him. I appreciate what you guys have to say.

I am going to be very honest about the art. This is the first time I've ever drawn in the manga style - ever. I've always been good with the American style, but the script called for manga, so whaddaya gonna do? It is improving, though. I have found a bit of a groove now. As for the site, like Dan said, we can't do too much to fix that. I think it looks fine, but then again, I'm color blind, so you may be right. The pacing is greatly improved on the newest batch of comics. We'll have those up soon enough.

I think it's coming along nicely. The newest comic is very well done - you definitely got something going here. Keep it up! ^_^

Thanks, Meister. I thought this thread would be left to die, but that really perked up my day. Actually, there was never supposed to be a movie theater part one - It was supposed to be a giant size double strip. I'll have to get Dan to correct that. Or we'll make a link later on with the whole thing intact. Fingers crossed that I can resolve this quickly.