Subliminal Catastrophe (very much like 8BT)
 

Me and a friend, Jason, have been working on the script to an ongoing comic flash with FF3/2 sprites. We have John's voice, Jason's doing it. I have no idea what Destiny's voice is going to be, and we have a bunch of other characters on the way. So far, I only have these two from the solid script. But I've made a hell of a lot more of the blank script by myself (to the point where I've introduced 6 other main characters, just following the John/Destiny storyline, including the character I'm going to do voice for). By 'blank' I mean totally unfunny, and somewhat short. Jason is the one that helps extend the dialogue and make it actually funny (anyone that reads posts from me knows my comedy is very, very stale). He is such a funny guy. So... here's scene one.

Episode 1 - Pickup Lines
Scene starts with a woman (Destiny) standing in the middle of a town, with a colloseum in the middle of it.
John: Oh, god, I'm SO late!! *rabbit in Alice and Wonderland sound: "I'm late, I'm late, I'm late!"
John, a gladiator in gold armor, comes running from the entrance of the town and bumps into the woman wearing a scarf over her breasts and a thong, with a thump, then falls back.
John: "Kyahh..!! Hey, watch where you're goin' lady,-" *stops and looks at Destiny as she turns around, beautiful* ...
*pause*
Destiny: "Are you.. the gatekeeper?"
John: *gets up and runs up to her* "I can be the gatekeeper to whatever you want, babe..."
Destiny: "Oh! Then our destiny is complete!!"
John: ".. uhh... really..? Most girls at least hit me or punch my nose. You serious?" *pause* "So.. can we make out yet?"
Destiny: "You are the gatekeeper. and I am the key. My name.. is Destiny. It is short for Destination Osiris Tower. Oh, we have a long journey ahead of us!"
John: "Wait. Aren't you mixing that up a bit..? I thought I would be the key. Unless.. you have a key too. In that case, uhh... are you pre-op, or post-op?"
Destiny: ".. pardon?"
John: "*cough* Uhh... Never mind. Just.. you know, tell me if you have a key because that would change.. quite a lot."
Destiny: "I am the key-"
John: "Okay, yeah! Don't want to hear about it; too much information..!"
Destiny: "Are you implying you are not the gatekeeper..?"
John: "Hey, if you're 100% girl, I'll be he gatekeeper to whatever you have."
Destiny: "Then our destiny is complete"
John: "Okay, good. *wipes his forehead*"
Jahn: "Wait, how much would it cost to compelte our uhh… *air quotes* 'destiny'?"
Destiny: "Well, of course, the only payment you would need is the willingness to not give up on our grueling ventures."
John: "Grueling, you say...? and for free, too! Hey, I'm in."
Destiny: "Excellent! Let us start our ventu-"
John: "Wait, wait, you aren't going to steal my kidneys, are you?"
Destiny: "... I.. beg your-"
John: "and you aren't seriously planning on getting it on right here in the open streets, are you?"
Destiny: ".... you think.. I'm a... whore..?!?!"
John: ".. what..? Oh, uhh... noooo, no, no, no, no... yes. Well.. what with the get-up, it's kind of obvious..!! *nervously frantic*"
Destiny: "My word!!! *slaps him across the face and turns away* That is for accusing my fashion as tainted! *turns back and punches him in the nose, him shrieking out*"
John: "*covers his nose* Augh!! Not the nose!! I hate the nose!! Dammit, what was that for?"
Destiny: "The god-awful pick-up lines."
John: "Hey, it's a virtue.."
Destiny: "and to think I thought you were the gatekeeper!"
John: "Listen, lady. All I want is sex. I'm sorry if I offended your religion. But you.. do have that, don't you? Sex?"
Destiny: "I live for only one purpose. To take the chosen to Osiris Tower and liberate the world of Tidus."
John: "[ Oh, crap, did I ever hit on the wrong whack job today.. ]"
John: "Uhh.. listen. I'm not really the uhh... Gatekeeper. Whatever that is, that I haven't figured out by now."
Destiny: *looks down* ".. this was a waste of time."
John: "Although I'm sure it's very exciting!!" *nervous smile*
Destiny: "There is no need to apologize for your incompetence.. where I come from, all the men are dogs."
John: "I didn't know you were into bestiality."
Destiny: "*sighs* Goodbye. *turns again*"
John: "No, hey, wait!" *grabs her shoulder* "Listen, I'm sorry; I was brought up not to take anything seriously. Normally, I'd say 'What I meant to say is do you prefer the company of animals', but you look really nice, (and pretty damn hot to top that off), and I'd rather not upset you any further." *pause* ".. listen.... I'm just here to fight and lay horrible pickup lines on hot chicks that'll never have sex with me. I'm sorry if I offended you."
Destiny: *looks up* "'Fight?'"
John: *stands straight* "Well! You must've heard of me. I'm... 'The Golden Knight!'" *'The Golden Knight' gets spelled in big cheesy action font with a star behind it on the screen* *gets hit with a rock, knocking him to the ground and stopping the cheesy effects*
Random Kid: "Loser!"
John: "*gets back up* Pizza-face!"
Random Kid: "It's acne..! You can't say that! That's provocative!"
John: "Yeah, I bet you don't even know what that word even means!"
Random Kid: "At least my dad has a real job!"
John: "Yeah, well, at least.. shut up!"
Random Kid: "No, you shut up."
John: "Why don't you shut up before I send my mom after you? She's got a pretty mean can o' whoop-ass, and it's where the sun never shines! and.. and her.. cooking is terrible! Take that!" *pause* *turns back to Destiny* "Damn kids and their big words and their small words."
Destiny: ".... you... you were saying?"
John: "Yeah, so I'm.. 'The Golden Knight!'" *'The Golden Knight' gets spelled in big cheesy action font with a star behind it on the screen (again)* *gets hit (again) with a rock, knocking him to the ground and stopping the cheesy effects (again)* "Stop that!!"
Random Kid: "Heh heh.." *runs off*
John: *turns back to her* "Don't tell me you haven't seen the competitions."
Destiny: "Well, I have seen a fight or two.. but not a fight with you."
John: "Well, then you haven't seen a fight! C'mon, I'm late already. To make up for causing so much uhh.. distraught to you, why don't I get you a free seat?"
Destiny: "Is that another bad pickup line?"

and that's it.

On another topic, does anyone know what happened to the guy that did the BM voice from 8-BT flash episodes 1-3? He'd be perfect for my Black Priest character. I won't lie, I already asked the e-mail address it says on TLF's profile about this, but I got no response and it's been a pretty long time.

[Edit: Most of the blurb at the top of my post explaining Subcat (nickname me and a friend came up with) didn't make any sense... corrected it. ]

Awesome!

I look forward to this...

I'm slightly confused as to why you're posting the preliminary script to a comic flash animation on the forums of some webcomic/the micronation of Nuklearpowersylvania. If it were me, I would keep it all inside until I could release the finished product.

But yeah, it's pretty funny.

And apparently being provocative is illegal in the world of Tidus.

I think there needs to be a better transition over to the competition lines. John seems to bring it up out of nowhere and it has no relation to the situation much.

I suggest using M$ Word for the cheesy action font.

I thought distraught was a past tense verb, or at least an adjective. I would use distress instead. Or maybe dsitraughtedness, I don't know.

Heh, that's pretty good. Keep working on it.

Thank god I have friends like Burkion to dig the topic up... > >
 

lol. Iunno, both me and Jason thought it was "distraught", or rather, how John would say it at least. John is our character. He's the easiest character for me to do, and Jason's doing the voice. I hope I'm going to be able to post up a comic, at least. If you want to look at the first unnofficial comic, it's on the TriAlliance site. I posted a TON on there lately, but mostly not Subliminal stuff.

Sorry for your being ignored back in the voice acting thread, but I'm here. Now, what was it you needed help with?

Concrete path go into the background? What do you mean by that? As in, have it stretch from the front of the screen to the distance?

RPGMaker. Shweet.

Yes! Sorry, it's not in my nature to be precise, and to make sense. You must see the big GREY block in the middle of the screen, going into the Nabaaro colluseum (the background I need help with is the city of Nabaaro). If I have this much trouble with the backgrounds, I'm probably going to have as much trouble doing the rest of them. Maybe I need someone to do the backgrounds for me? or maybe I just need someone to tell me or show me how to thin a square out...

Things I also need help with are voice actors, people to give me tips on flash (as both me and the person doing the flash aren't going to know much about flash besides online tutorials), sprite editors (who can do complex sprite positions I can't, like SWKC/B), someone else to help with the comedy (because all that's ever on Jason's mind are sex jokes), and like... anything else you can think of, basically. I also need a better site to post on, because the site I'm on doesn't allow porn and me and Patrice do a lot of that. OH! and I need someone to help htmlscript Sphere City (all of the characters have different color fonts, and the size of the font changes between in character, and the small out of character blurbs) (you can find Sphere City in "Material") so it works properly too. But that's un-Sublminal-related. But, yeah, if you want to be involved in a comic, or have a word or two of advice... please help. That's how Brian's comic is good. Because he has people and viewers who tell him what's good and not, and has tons of tips in his mail bag.

When it comes to roads from the foreground to the background, it's a little simple, but not as simple if it has detail. It's basically a tall, narrow triangle depending on the street's width and length, and shrinks as it keeps stretching into the distance, the two ends meeting at a "horizon" point.

Comedy? When it comes to comedy, there's often a serious situation that has to be involved. What usually makes it funny is when someone says or does something ridiculous, and soon, and just gets out of hand, possibly off-topic on a large scale, and even more ridiculous things.

Mmph. Yeah. But I need to shrink the square of concrete into the distance,and I have no idea how to do that. The way I did it with the grass is, I just shrunk the squares into smaller squares. But I have to have a square that looks something that looks like.....
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... excuse my awful attempt.

Yeah, that's often difficult when it comes to Flash...