Could I get some critique?

Orginality - Fantasy, assassin, fire, sword... B-

RP possibilty - Assassins and magic, happens all the time. A.

RP like - Looks like part of a RP, and you even left parts of it open as if other RPers are there. A+.

If it's intresting - Intrestingish A-.

Detail - Some what detailed, though some things that should have happened were ignored (Keil would have gotten the Dwarf Spirit stuff on him when rolling around and should have been on fire). B.

Writing ability - Nothing special, nothing bad. B+.

Grammar - Nothing wrong I noticed. A.

Overall - B+.

I'm pretty sure I know my problems, but I'd like a proffesional analysis too, just for the heck of it.
Would you please, IHMN?

Orginality - Original... And a bull for a mount, that is new. A.

RP possibilty - Western... thing... B.

RP like - It's something that can happen in an RP. B.

If it's intresting - Intrestingish A-.

Detail - Some random bits of detail, but some important ones missing (Dusty, the bar). B.

Writing ability - Nothing special, nothing bad. B+.

Grammar - Nothing wrong I noticed, but I like spaces between paragraphs personally, A/A-.

Overall - B.

Proving grounds? You guys are kidding right? C'mon people, can't people ust come here to take a load off work, or school, or whatever hell that is called life? Wow... just... wow...

It's nice to see how others feel about your work though.

I agree to that... but I don't see why BM and IHMN are the only ones grading... I mean. This is just me, I'm probably gonna get a lot of flak for this, but I'm just tring to speak my mind, this is just for fun. It's not a job, at least... I'm not getting paid to do it.

Because if everyone graded the thread would get to spammy. People can comment if they want, no one every said they can't, just not grade (Not like anyone would care if they graded anyway).

You mean you're not getting paid?

Also: I assume my minus was because of my sloppy ending, where I kind of truncated things quickly due to it being 4 am when I wrote that?

The sloppy ending, and the huge Dues Ex Machina of the group of super kids.

It also doesn't really make sense, seeing as the main guy didn't even need to be there for the kids to get away.