Hey guys check the comic Zack drew for me
 

So yeah this is something I've had on the backburners for a while, finally put some text into it recently and I wanted to share.

http://pics.livejournal.com/miraigen/pic/000raf0f
http://pics.livejournal.com/miraigen/pic/000rbb3q
http://pics.livejournal.com/miraigen/pic/000rc85r
http://pics.livejournal.com/miraigen/pic/000rd10r

I don't know what's going on, but I am intrigued.

How much did it cost you?

Quite a bit.

It eventually is going to unfold into a superhero story but that's far far down the line, and much further than I'd be able to purchase in straight commissions. This is mostly to set some stagework and interest if possible.

So he's an amnesiac psychic, possibly a survivor from a scientific experiment gone horribly wrong? Sounds interesting, and I like how you've set it up. In particular, the sparse use of text makes me happy.

I like it. It looks like it could be very interesting!

I absolutely hate thought bubbles unless absolutely necessary - when I was putting the text in I told Zack what he was thinking with the intent not to actually say it. That way not only is there an element of mystery but you need to have dialog for it to get explained. Good to see my thoughts were right about this.

I think my only real complaint is that the font doesn't seem to match the art as well as I think it should, but it's a minor quibble.

Probably because all the comic book fonts I had while doing RID are gone and I'd have to go hunt them down. So I just chose one stock font at random.

EDIT: I'm not sure if the cop's first panel should include a "Freeze!" or not, but I'm leaning towards 'yes' due to Jacob's reaction.

I'd say stick with the "Hey, whoa, hold it." The cop seems more confused than "Freeze!" or whatever, and Jacob seems more annoyed in a sort of, "Great, a cop/guard pointing a gun at me. Just great." kinda of way than anything else.

I'm just saying Jacob's putting his hands up in the same panel that the cop says his first line seems odd to me, though I might just be overly critical of myself.