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RaiRai 05-17-2004 01:23 PM

Within.
 
It's a far cry from the fantasies of lives I wish I'd lead
a step away from reality in the footsteps I longed to tread
these weary eyes so tearful of the songs that time forgot
this heart throbbing painfully from the word left there to rot
Forgotten tales of happiness on paper laid there plain
wishing to be read and longed to be imagined once again
It's an ocean away from the memories I thought I once had
a flight away from the dreams that made me both joyful and sad
I'll try to capture everything if my mind agrees to wake
to allow these perfect images in the form of words to take
the bitter sweetest pictures that my mind has in store
that leaves this soul craving and searching for more
I don't want to stop now even though I'm drank dry
Continue to push forward and aim toward the sky
I thought I was destined to fail, but I see that I can win
it's all here inside my heart, everything within.

Elminster_Amaur 05-17-2004 01:47 PM

Inspiring...now I'm writing a song to it. I'm having trouble writing any accompanyment, but I think that that is for the best, as this poem seems to be more of a solitary type thing.

RaiRai 05-17-2004 02:05 PM

I couldn't really imagine most of my poetry with music set to it. Oftentimes the line lengths vary and I don't concentrate enough on syllables. It's a flaw I have. ><

Elminster_Amaur 05-17-2004 02:09 PM

Generally why music is written after the poetry in most cases.

RaiRai 05-17-2004 03:25 PM

Not generally. Poems are even MEANT for music. Their purpose is to be read and felt. Nothing more. If I creating lyrics, perhaps music would be an issue, but I'm not.

Elminster_Amaur 05-17-2004 03:41 PM

And it shouldn't be an issue to a poet, but if a musician finds inspiration in a poem, they should still write what they feel the poet meant down as music. Both are just forms of expression, and as such should seem to come solely from feeling. A great poet once said that if it doesn't seem effortless, you haven't spent enough time on it.(Not exact words, as it was in a poem, but that is how it would be translated into a sentence that someone could read without wondering what it meant)

RaiRai 05-17-2004 04:13 PM

I'm flattered that you'd want to put music to my poem. I just find it slightly pompous how you're basically telling me what I'm writing. I am both a poet and a musician, so making points against me in these cases is slightly mute. Just try not to sound as arrogant and things will be fine.

Peo 05-17-2004 05:37 PM

I though the Poem was very good,just to state my opinion. Not that my opinion matters much,but hey,I try.

Elminster_Amaur 05-17-2004 08:48 PM

I wasn't telling you what you're writing, I was telling you that I wanted to put it to music. I would like to ask you now what your interpretation on the poem you have written, before I get too far into the composition. And I wasn't trying to sound pompous or arrogant, but rather, I just typed the first thing that came to mind, as I have no sense of when to talk and when not to. THAT is my flaw. That and an ego the size of Russia's land-mass.

semysane 05-17-2004 09:33 PM

A great poem as always RaiRai. :)


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