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Unread 08-24-2011, 02:36 AM   #1
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It looks like it works to me! I do have a tendency to fancypants it up in my more formal writing, so it's good to find ways to say the same thing without sounding like you (and by "you" I mean I) just finished a Frasier marathon.
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Unread 08-24-2011, 02:50 AM   #2
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I recommend trying to be a tad more aggressive in justifying why you need/ deserve the financial aid. Is there a concern you will not be able to pay back the existing debt?
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Unread 08-24-2011, 07:43 AM   #3
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Lay it on real thick. You were diagnosed with rheumatoid arthritis, gout, a bladder infection, Crohn's Disease, cancer of the epiglottis and leprosy all in the same day.

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Unread 08-24-2011, 05:06 PM   #4
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Hey guys, thanks for all the help!

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Your request is approved thru spring 2012.

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I believe the technical term is fucking WIN!
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Unread 08-24-2011, 05:09 PM   #5
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Excellent! Happy for you, Greg!
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Unread 08-24-2011, 06:43 PM   #6
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You used Meister's appeal, right? That one was the most convincing one. It's nice to see your appeal worked.
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Unread 08-24-2011, 06:48 PM   #7
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Good shit. Now to spend all your money on booze and cigarettes like a proper student.
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Unread 08-24-2011, 06:49 PM   #8
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Unread 08-24-2011, 06:53 PM   #9
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Yeah, that was in the response he gave me. Perhaps I didn't need to worry so much about my run-ons...
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Unread 08-25-2011, 12:22 AM   #10
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Yeah, that was in the response he gave me. Perhaps I didn't need to worry so much about my run-ons...
Maybe...but on the other hand, I figure writing an appeal like that is like showing up to a court hearing, or a job interview: You (represented, in this case, by your text) want to look your best, and the little details matter.

I bet that for each appeal that dude gets that looks like yours, he gets half a dozen that are the grammatical equivalent of turning up in a stained Def Leppard t-shirt, ripped and baggy jeans and cheap dollar-store flip-flops on dirt-crusted feet.

Of course, now that you've secured your future as a student:

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Good shit. Now to spend all your money on booze and cigarettes like a proper student.
Do this, plus pot. So much pot.
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