The Dreadful -- Chapter 13: Old Holden

Kalbelgarion · 03-24-2014, 09:46 AM

I have a small suggestion: I think the footnotes are a bit distracting and give the reader too little credit. The flashback in the panel was a nice touch, but putting an asterisk telling where the reader saw that scene before is a little much. It was only 13 pages ago.

Look at the big punchline at the conclusion of 8BT: There wasn't a footnote saying "See page 7 for the setup to this joke!"

Having a footnote for a word like "blueberry" is also a bit overt. The real meaning of that word in this world should be conveying through information like which characters use it, and how other characters react. Reminds me a bit of this XKCD comic.

Love the comic otherwise!

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03-24-2014, 09:46 AM	#1
Kalbelgarion King Rappy Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Washington, DC Posts: 111	I have a small suggestion: I think the footnotes are a bit distracting and give the reader too little credit. The flashback in the panel was a nice touch, but putting an asterisk telling where the reader saw that scene before is a little much. It was only 13 pages ago. Look at the big punchline at the conclusion of 8BT: There wasn't a footnote saying "See page 7 for the setup to this joke!" Having a footnote for a word like "blueberry" is also a bit overt. The real meaning of that word in this world should be conveying through information like which characters use it, and how other characters react. Reminds me a bit of this XKCD comic. Love the comic otherwise!