How I Killed Your Master: Page 025 to ~046

[Derp]

The fight scenes don't look right to me. I'm no artist myself so I can't give detailed criticism, but I'm just not believing the force and motion.

I thought this comic was beautifully executed (and completely awesome) up until this point, so I'm kind of hoping that this is either a.) the artist warming up or b.) a style that will grow on me. I do agree that 28 looks better than 27.

Originally Posted by Martyr

bald lil guy

You mean Fei? I thought he was supposed to be enormous?

A smug smirk at some point wouldn't surprise me. I actually thought he had smiled some after he saw Wong use one of his forms, but looking back now it appears that his visage was just substantially less enraged than one would expect, creating the illusion of smilitude.

[MSperoni]

Originally Posted by Derp

I thought this comic was beautifully executed (and completely awesome) up until this point, so I'm kind of hoping that this is either a.) the artist warming up or b.) a style that will grow on me. I do agree that 28 looks better than 27.

Well so far so good with Brian's opinion on the fights.. John hasn't said anything but I generally never hear from him one way or the other. (Though when I do it's always polite!)

Keep in mind it's not over yet, there's a kind of rhythm here. But then again some people don't like certain kinds of things purely on genre no matter how well they're executed.

Hopefully the style will grow on you (or I guess you can skip the subsequent fight scenes :p), because unless I get orders from Brian n' JohnThe Powers That Be to change it up, it's going to be this way. I've drawn a lot of fight scenes, but then again I haven't drawn one in like a year or more, so maybe there's some rust.

Anywho, I'm satisfied w/ the way they look so far. Except I wanted Fei to kick one of the guys in the nuts, but he never does


Maybe that'll be for the NEXT fight.

[Veho]

Originally Posted by MSperoni

Except I wanted Fei to kick one of the guys in the nuts, but he never does


Maybe that'll be for the NEXT fight.

Maybe he's saving that for Wong.

[BattyAsHell]

Originally Posted by Derp

The fight scenes don't look right to me. I'm no artist myself so I can't give detailed criticism, but I'm just not believing the force and motion.

I thought this comic was beautifully executed (and completely awesome) up until this point, so I'm kind of hoping that this is either a.) the artist warming up or b.) a style that will grow on me. I do agree that 28 looks better than 27.

I kind of liked 29. The details on the blocking, followed by a pretty sweet looking... umm, what's it called.. Kind of like a reverse knife hand, sort of.

Can't think of it. Been too many years since I practiced, I guess.

Looked good, though. And in general, I'm liking the attention to detail.

Any specific analysis of the fight scenes, so we have an idea what you find lacking? Maybe compare it with existing fighting manga like History's Strongest Disciple, or something you'd consider better?

Edit: RIDGE HAND! That's what it looked like Fei used at the end of 29.

[BattyAsHell]

Anyone else hear "FINISH HIM!" when reading 31?

[MSperoni]

After reading some above messages, I was thinking that if the problems w/ how I did the fight scene are having to do with the fact I didn't do it enough "like another comic" then I'm not sure I'll be able to address any of those concerns. I'd rather not end up just being a copycat..

I looked around online at History's Strongest Disciple, maybe I was looking at the wrong chapters but I wasn't really all that impressed with how it was done. So if anyone says "be more like it" that's definitely not going to happen (unless the person asking me to do so is Brian).

EDIT: After looking over some better pages, the fights in H'sSD don't look TOO bad in spots..

I kinda wish we were at another fight scene so I could give it another go


I'm not sure how I feel about the (red) foom.. I usually don't like hints of color in a black and white comic but then again it adds some strength to the panels.. sooo.. I guess I'm neutral on the matter. Jeff's worked in comics a long time so I trust his judgement.

[Kim]

I like this page more than the last one. I don't know what it was, but something about the last one irked me somehow. This one though? Totally, totally rad.

[Corel]

Just to add from today's comic that it looks much clearer when we can see the face of the punched assilant; in the last few pages it was a great big explosion over where the point of contact was. Personally I prefer seeing their pain and suffering, go voilence go!

Also, shouldn't his face be going the other way from the strike in the last panel? From first glance the movement lines look like Fei's hand is going in a haymaker arc but from the panel before it looks like that it could be exploding as some form of backhand from his mid torso, which would explain why his jaw is going that way!

/nitpicking

[MSperoni]

Well to my eyes it goes: Fei pulls Jiao's arm down and then punches him in the right side of his face. (that's why his cheek looks all mushed up and his head's moving off like it is).

and you misspelled "violence"! /nitpicking :p

[Corel]

Ah yes, I can see that now. It's just the motion blur looks like it's coming from the right to the left, making it quite confusing.

Also, voilance is totally a word. Like Feilance.