All the skies are grey - Page 3

Sifright · 02-02-2013, 07:23 PM

A maudlin thread
Sad hateful users abound
Stop the Hatred please

The pursuit of cash
A blue world globally warming
Needs no further flames

**Revising Ocelot** · 02-02-2013, 07:32 PM

Gruntilda says that your haikus stink.
Try some rhyming couplets instead, she thinks!

Sifright · 02-02-2013, 07:39 PM

Hmm, an interesting concept this does seem.
To find words that rhyme might be hard I would deem!

So as I continue along this poetry attempt
Allow me to express the depths of my contempt.

For you see what we call the human race.
is destroying our world at a tremendous pace.

Inspite of the knowledge our greatest minds sing
ever more CO2 to the atmosphere we bring.

Our oceans rise and not a word in the media is spoken
our hearts and souls cry out but all is broken.

in the end it would appear that we are doomed.
but who cares when there is more that must be consumed.

Locke cole · 02-02-2013, 08:38 PM

From all these poems, I would surmise
You want to win some sort of prize.
But despite the haikus
that you skillfully use
In the thread title, you misspelled "skies"

Sifright · 02-02-2013, 08:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Locke cole

From all these poems, I would surmise
You want to win some sort of prize.
But despite the haikus
that you skillfully use
In the thread title, you misspelled "skies"

Locke cole · 02-02-2013, 08:45 PM

Whether or not the crying is fake,
there's no need for any heartache.
for though I could scoff
"your meter is off!"
I get the point you're trying to make.

Sifright · 02-02-2013, 08:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Locke cole

Whether or not the crying is fake,
there's no need for any heartache.
for though I could scoff
"your meter is off!"
I get the point you're trying to make.

For soothe what is this meter you mention?
My poems have no need of such a convention.
The words I bring forth to you all
speak for themselves no matter how they fall.

Though my skills in poetry are quite poor
and whilst my prose lacks much grandeur
This attempt at communication I am sure
that you all must sadly endure

is an outlet for me to explain and constrain
the things that bring to me, much pain

a last edit before I head to the bed by my wall
today is my first day attempting poetry, good bye all.

Magus · 02-02-2013, 09:19 PM

I guess the skies were grey today but it was dropping a nice beautiful fluffy snow here. You know, the nice kind, not the crappy kind.

Japan · 02-05-2013, 04:15 PM

Light flickers through leaves, shattering old hearts for new in brilliant autumn.

(This is an American sentence, which is a thing that is mostly a haiku but also a lot of Ginsberg. Its worth a google.)

02-02-2013, 07:23 PM	#21
Sifright Fact sphere is the most handsome Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,108	A maudlin thread Sad hateful users abound Stop the Hatred please The pursuit of cash A blue world globally warming Needs no further flames __________________ Orgies of country consuming violence

02-02-2013, 07:32 PM	#22
Revising Ocelot Douchebag Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Probably somewhere in England. Posts: 1,897	Gruntilda says that your haikus stink. Try some rhyming couplets instead, she thinks! __________________ magic sucks

02-02-2013, 07:39 PM	#23
Sifright Fact sphere is the most handsome Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,108	Hmm, an interesting concept this does seem. To find words that rhyme might be hard I would deem! So as I continue along this poetry attempt Allow me to express the depths of my contempt. For you see what we call the human race. is destroying our world at a tremendous pace. Inspite of the knowledge our greatest minds sing ever more CO2 to the atmosphere we bring. Our oceans rise and not a word in the media is spoken our hearts and souls cry out but all is broken. in the end it would appear that we are doomed. but who cares when there is more that must be consumed. __________________ Orgies of country consuming violence Last edited by Sifright; 02-02-2013 at 07:55 PM.

02-02-2013, 09:19 PM	#28
Magus Archer and Armstrong vs. the World Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Pennsylvania Posts: 7,164	I guess the skies were grey today but it was dropping a nice beautiful fluffy snow here. You know, the nice kind, not the crappy kind.

02-05-2013, 04:15 PM	#29
Japan Sent to the cornfield Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Myself Posts: 212	Light flickers through leaves, shattering old hearts for new in brilliant autumn. (This is an American sentence, which is a thing that is mostly a haiku but also a lot of Ginsberg. Its worth a google.)